Self-introduction letter (Updated)
Subject:
Self-introduction
Dear Professor Brad,
My name is Chow Kai
Chuan. I am currently a student pursuing a degree in mechanical engineering at
Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT). I am writing this letter to introduce a little more about myself.
I graduated from Ngee
Ann Polytechnic in 2017, with a diploma in aerospace technology prior to my
service for national service for two years. Aerospace technology was my first
choice since I have always been intrigued by how aircraft were designed and
made. Being an engineer has always been my dream job, which is why I continue
my studies of mechanical engineering in SIT. Through my current study program, I
wish to acquire a range of knowledge in the field of engineering, grasping and
implementing the concept of the modules taught throughout the course.
Interacting with
strangers has never been my forte. I am a shy person by nature and it is rather
difficult for me to convey my thoughts to someone whom I do not know face to
face. Most of the time when I am in a place with unfamiliar faces, I will tend
to be awkward. In addition, I have difficulties in speaking to a large crowd as
I lack the confidence to do so. I also feel that I have a shallow vocabulary,
which makes my speech less fluent.
In terms of my strengths,
I am able to work well with people once I get to know them longer. I know my
roles in the project group and I am able to accomplish my tasks on time. Even
though I am not a talkative person, I do bring in a sense of humor to my peers,
when I am comfortable with them.
My goal for this module
is for me to learn how to communicate effectively and proficiently. I believe
that it is a vital skill to possess when we enter the workforce in the future
regardless of who we will be conversing with. Nevertheless, I look forward to
learning more knowledge and techniques from your classes.
Best regards,
Kai Chuan
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ReplyDeleteDear Kai Chuan,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading through your letter of introduction, I would like a raise a pointer or two.
In your first paragraph, in the sentence, "I am writing this letter for you to know a little more about me". The words "for you" would be redundant in this case. It would have been nice to explain how you came to be intrigued by aircraft design .
I look forward to spending the next few weeks with you.
Cheers,
Sande
Dear Kai Chuan,
ReplyDeleteWe know each other since year one in polytechnic and I am glad to be in the same course as you in university. Good job on your letter of introduction, I have some comments regarding about your letter but please take it with a pinch of salt as I am not sure whether if I am correct as well.
For the first paragraph, there is a sentence where it goes 'I am writing this letter for you', I believe it 'for you' would not be require as your target audience is just the professor himself. For the strength part, it would be nice for you to include an example of an project that you've done recently.
In conclusion, keep up with the good work you have done so far and see you around in class.
Best Regards,
Benedict Cheong Wen Quan
Dear Kai Chuan,
ReplyDeleteThanks for this clear, well-developed letter. You address each touchpoint of the assignment and you provide a good degree of specific detail. I appreciate learning about the reason for your enrolment in this degree programme, but I do wonder why you call engineering your 'dream job.'
To take this letter up a notch, you could thread your interest in engineering together with your strength in communication (project work) and your ultimate career goal.
In fact, you do a decent job of discussing your strength and weakness in communication, and I like th way you connect your goals with workforce needs.
There is one minor issue here in ters of language use ( verb tense):
-- In addition, I have difficulties in speaking to a large crowd as I lacked the confidence to do so. > (need for consistency in tense)
In addition, I have difficulties in speaking to a large crowd as I lack the confidence to do so.
I look forward to learning more about you this term.
Cheers,
Brad
Dear Professor Brad,
DeleteThank you for your feedback on my letter. I appreciate the tips and pointers given. I look forward to acquiring more knowledge from your classes.
Best regards,
Kai Chuan